My heart is pounding. Gotta rise above it.
The emotion in this episode is astounding, and your artwork never ceases to amaze me, Jesse.

bwom !

Damn Inception had me hearing the BWOM as that booming horn noise.
Hope you’re feeling better Jesse!

“RUN DUDE!”

“bwom” is such a nice sound, but I feel bad for these people because it was a little too much “bwom” for them.

Hi Jesse this is really good but I am really really confused are these events happening concurrently? The cross-cutting isn’t really working when you publish the next volume you will have to re-jig the order of the pages and draw a few extras to fill in the blanks. At some point it’s not good to keep perpetuating a mystery, that was what ruined LOST and since I know you watched that show I am sure you can see why I use that as a comparison. It’s not a problem of style, your illustrations are getting better and better. It’s about maintaining a thread, a thought in the reader’s mind. I know you have been trying to induce this in a deliberately alternative manner – perhaps even on a different wavelength or vibration – but somehow the breaks between the pulses have got too far apart and the carrier for the signal is too weak for people to tune into. I know there are the rabid fans in here who will leap on me but I bought the book too and will buy the next one and I am a huge fan – and I have a very similar education and desires to your ambitions… so this is just actually because I care. If I was watching this as a film, editing it, I would tell you that you need to put some of the pieces of the puzzle back in. The flow is not right and it isn’t just ambiguous it is literally missing necessary cuts for the viewer to follow the story – you need to go back and re-shoot. I make films not comics I wish I could draw like you but this is an editing problem and I can tell you that at the moment you are heading for either a moment of bad exposition to explain things or continuing with the pulses getting further apart and more divergent. The bottom line is as crazy and weird as the first 30 pages were they made more sense because of two reasons: firstly, because the parameters of the story were more or less understood and because of the expectation of something which would reach out and grab you as a viewer. In my view there is a mistake of accelerating the narrative with the war and battle – you maybe intended that to grab and it does stylistically and visually but not as story. Anyway. Just a critique, could be useful to hear. For example, how the hell did cronus and his sister get to the place where the earth was falling away (from an earthquake-type thing of the battle between fake nommo and Zeus I guess?) – how did they get there and we didn’t even see the earthquake start etc etc… there have now been too many of these ‘jumps’ and it’s a mistake… which can be corrected.

Hi Jesse sounds like you have got a plan and there’s no need for me to fret 😉

I am sorry, you are right about LOST, towards the end they did try to explain things that didn’t need to be explained, I stopped watching it so I guess I am talking about seasons 2-4? I think? Just kept adding baroque twist after baroque twist – I just tuned back in for the last 3 episodes which were nonsense as you say.

Thanks for replying and I didn’t think you were going to do an explanation moment or anything I just meant that you might get put in that trap (or at least from an editing point of view afterwards either re-shoot or ‘explain’ are the two usual solutions); I definitely think you shouldn’t reveal the symbolic references nor the story references especially when if one looks at the kinds of crazy websites you like then it’s easy to start opening the doors… (I will never forgive you for introducing me to vigilant citizen btw!) hell even if one used Google they could find it if they wanted, the point is that if you had to declare meaning it will always get in the way of the reader experiencing ‘meaning’ for himself so I agree with you 100%.

As long as you stick with your plan to revise and fill in gaps at or towards the very end (and like I said, I mean in terms of action – i.e. who is where and what are they doing – not making the ideas ‘obvious’), then just continue doing whatcha doing. Thank you so much for replying and understanding why I was writing as well as the context of like a guy at art school looking at your work and offering his ‘take’.

Oh Yeah… Benjamin dude!!! It’s the never ending story
BRO!! Hes like Explaining the ice cube sized portion of the Iceberg of an epic this story is!! Sooo…!!
ICE ICE BABAY!!